Mediocrity is the root of all evil
What is it to be a clock? It's much more than an intro movie (unfortunatly 90% like every other intro movie I've seen) nor is it to put B in your favorites, or to "vote the fifen" on Clock flashes. This is something you will have to learn if you really plan on lasting. You are not a true Clock but instead simply a fan. This takes time, dedication, and of course above all else thought. More so I see no understanding as to the history of the Clock Crew, the actual understanding of humor, nor anything else. In fact I will go even further to say the only reason this movie has passed is in fact because it had the word "Clock" in the title. Wheras sometimes this sort of thing can be concidered somewhat funny in this case it is simply a horrible mockery and truly just a debasing statement created with positive intentions. This sort of thing scares me. It's like a sewer rat admiring good art, and then drawing stick figures to post in a trendy gallry like some sort of colt to a fat man with no understanding of concept... Only of buisness. And that is what I see. You are no clock but rather a colt to the Newgrounds fandom.
In conclusion I am disgusted and this should not have passed.
So what can you do to improve? It's simple really. You know what your capabilities are. You know what is good and what is crap. You should know especially if you enjoy Clock movies. I don't expect the work of an instant classic but I do expect effort. And that is what you lack in. Effort and understanding of any vague idea of sheer concept. The brainchild has been hooked with a coathanger, and at this point I have grave doubts you could ever bring it back to life.